Smiling Proud Wanderer: Excellent book review (1)

Published:

精彩书评(1)[楼主]青训—佑嗳

Wonderful book review (1) [Original] Youth Training—Youai

支持大大的好文文,蛮精彩的另一种笑傲江湖啊!加油稳定的更新啊!大大

Supports great and good texts, which is quite wonderful and another kind of Swordsman! Come on for a stable update! Greatly

岳不群夫妇现在对于岳峰很疼爱,也是的岳峰想以后无论如何都要保全他们。(真不知道,该为他因为当上了大大文文的主角而高兴,还是为作为了伪君子—岳不群的儿子而感到悲哀啊。纠结了。期待可以在大大的笔下,看到可以另一种感觉的岳不群哦,潜水看下文。)之后岳峰经过自身的努力,有了内息,然后是岳不群传授岳峰剑法。岳不群的“有意与无意之间,使得岳峰专研,之后“悟道”了,并持续了两年多,最后内力大增。剑法也感悟了许多!清醒过来后的岳峰,得知自己的妹妹–灵珊都已经四岁了。在陪妹妹玩的时候,见到了自己的母亲—宁中则和田伯光,阴险的田伯光向小不点岳峰和其妹出手。

Yue Buqun and his wife love Yue Feng very much now, and Yue Feng wants to save them no matter what. (I really don’t know. Should he be happy because he became the protagonist of Da Wenwen, or feel sad for being the son of a hypocrite—Yue Buqun. I am entangled. I look forward to seeing Da Wenwen’s pen You can feel Yue Buqun in another way. Dive and see below.) After that, Yue Feng gained internal energy through his own efforts, and then Yue Buqun taught Yue Feng the sword technique. Yue Buqun’s “intentional and unintentional” made Yue Feng specialize in research, and then “enlightened Dao” for more than two years, and finally increased his internal strength. Swordsmanship also realized a lot! After waking up, Yue Feng learned of himself Lingshan’s sister, Lingshan, is already four years old. While playing with her, I saw my mother—Ning Zhongze and Tian Boguang, and the sinister Tian Boguang shot Xiaobudian Yue Feng and his sister.

千钧一发之刻,岳峰会发生什么事呐?还有后文中令狐冲如何的当上岳不群的大弟子的类?还有岳峰得到了一本秘籍,是什么呐?难不成是岳不群后来要修炼的辟邪剑法?还有嘿嘿,都是悬念,不剧透了!潜水看精彩的下文去了!哈哈哈。大大也要狠给力的加油更新哦!

At the very moment, what happened to Yue Summit? And how did Ling Huchong become the big disciple of Yue Buqun in the following article? And Yue Feng got a cheat book, what is it? Could it be the sword technique that Yue Buqun would practice later on to ward off evil spirits? And hey, it’s all suspense, not spoiler! Diving to see the wonderful following went! Hahaha. It’s going to be a great update!

看见大大文文中的那些个人物的名字,多熟悉啊,让我想到了好久好久之前的自己其实很迷恋笑傲江湖的,也超喜欢《沧海一声笑》,那是一首很让人感触的歌曲,尤其是综合着笑傲江湖一起来听,就感觉到了更有味道!而现在大大又写出了另一种笑傲江湖,真的很不错的!所以,大大,要加油的稳定的更新下去,我很期待大大的大作啊!嘿嘿。

Seeing the names of the personalities in the big text, how familiar is it, it reminds me that a long time ago, I was actually obsessed with Xiaoxiaojianghu, and I really liked “A Laugh from the Sea”. It was a very interesting song. Songs that people feel, especially when you listen to it with Swordsman, you feel more flavorful! And now I have written another kind of Swordsman, which is really good! So, I am going to keep up with the steady update, I am looking forward to a big masterpiece! Hey-hey.

还有对于穿越文,大大把握的不错哦!穿越的快且不啰嗦,也让我看的爽,且不会觉得剧情上拖沓!嘿嘿,很喜欢这样的感觉啊!

Also, it’s good to have a good grasp of the traverse text! The traversal is fast and not long-winded, and it makes me feel refreshed, and I won’t feel procrastinated in the plot! Hey, I really like this feeling!

我觉得也是,要是真的写成很做作的把自己伪装成天真孩童,我就会纠结了。还好大大这样的处理,真的很不错,偷偷的记住,学习下哈!嘿嘿

I think so, if I really write it artificially and disguise myself as an innocent child, I will get entangled. Fortunately, this kind of treatment is really good, secretly remember, learn! Hey

然后是我看完文文的小小的建议,仅供大大参、考:大大的简介虽说很直点中心,但是有没有感觉还是缺少了点味道啊,是的,就是感觉缺少了吸引力。建议:大大去论坛看看影影文针对于简介所讲的内容,对大大的简介的写法上会有所帮助哦!嘿嘿。加油!期待也等待大大更好的简介哦!

Then I have a small suggestion after reading the article, just for reference and examination: Although the big introduction is very straight and centered, do you feel that it still lacks a bit of flavor? Yes, it just feels lacking Attractive. Suggestion: Go to the forum to see what the video and text are about in the introduction, it will be helpful to the writing of the introduction! Hey-hey. come on! Looking forward to and waiting for a much better introduction!

剧情上缺少了伏笔的设置,不知道大大有木有感觉类?!我个人建议,要是在每章上都有一个小小的伏笔,为下章节的精彩坐下铺垫,勾起读者想要看下文的冲动,这样的话会更好哦!嘿嘿

There is a lack of foreshadowing settings in the plot, I don’t know if there is a lot of feeling? ! I personally suggest that if there is a small foreshadowing in each chapter, it will pave the way for the excitement of the next chapter, and arouse the urge of readers to read the following, it will be better! Hey

大大写的蛮不错的,剧情的精彩环环相扣,期待大大能够稳定更新,要知道这是直接的不光是影响大大的文文的签约,更严重的是影响了读者的追随,这样的话多划不来啊,是吧。有时间,大大就选择多村稿子,为大大不能够及时的更新,做好前提的打算,是最好的哦!嘿嘿

The big letters are pretty good, and the plot is intertwined. I look forward to a stable update. You must know that this is a direct impact not only on the signing of the text, but more seriously, it affects the reader’s follow. That’s not worth it, right? If you have time, I will choose the multi-cun manuscript. In order to make the prerequisite plan, it is the best! Hey

发表人:佑嗳发表时间:2012-02-23

Publisher: Youai Published time: 2012-02-23

[1楼]回复:青训—佑嗳支持大大的好文文,蛮精彩的另一种笑傲江湖啊!加油稳定的更新啊!大大引用回复

[1 Floor] Reply: Youth Training—You Ai supports great good texts, another wonderful kind of Swordsman! Come on for a stable update! Great quote reply

大大,要加油更新啊!@为啥子断更了类!哎!

Great, I want to update it! @Why break the class! Why!

发表人:佑嗳最新回复:2012-02-24

Posted by: Youai Latest reply: 2012-02-24

[2楼]回复:青训—佑嗳支持大大的好文文,蛮精彩的另一种笑傲江湖啊!加油稳定的更新啊!大大引用回复

[2F] Reply: Youth Training—You Ai supports the great writing, which is quite wonderful another kind of Swordsman! Come on for a stable update! Great quote reply

要****了,不过看在你长评的面子上,我马上更

It’s going to be a ****, but in the face of your long comment, I will update it soon

发表人:我是影玄最新回复:2012-02-25

Posted by: I’m Yingxuan. Latest reply: 2012-02-25

[3楼]回复:青训—佑嗳支持大大的好文文,蛮精彩的另一种笑傲江湖啊!加油稳定的更新啊!大大引用回复

[3楼]Re: Youth Training—You’ai supports great good texts, another wonderful kind of Swordsman! Come on for a stable update! Great quote reply

这么长的评论,我好感动啊!

I’m so touched by such a long comment!

发表人:我是影玄最新回复:2012-02-25

Posted by: I’m Yingxuan. Latest reply: 2012-02-25

       

Leave a Reply